bitchin'
your flow is pretty sweeeet. that laugh at the start... i think it could be processed more, a bit of delay and a little reverb and pull the volume down a bit.
In the first verse I think the input gain of the microphone was too high cause it sounds like input clipping. the rest of the song is fine though, well recorded.
What sort of microphone are you using?
the beat isn't bad but a bit simple for my taste (i like more fast kickdrum action). i think the chorus could do with more crunchy, distorted sounds or more epic strings.
the end is very ominous. nice work.